mason essay finished

i think that the essay was very good in the beginning so it was very interesting to see how it changed and improved in the second and final drafts. the title of the essay is very straight forward but it does not grab my attention. However it does fit with the story he portrays in his paper. the introduction is very much improved in his final draft as well as the rest of his essay. he basically added details and more evidence to support his claims. he did not really delete anything from his paper. he reviced it, refrazed some things and added details. this is what i do when i write papers i do not really delete anything from my papaers i usually add or restate things to make my paper flow more. so in a sence it helps a lot when it comes to making my papers better. however it also makes it very hard for me to delete anything from a paper i write because i rarely have to do so. the hardest part of revising my essay is desiding what part needs the revizing.